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Re: Not bad.
Posted By: Wayward Spleen™	Date: 12/10/10 9:50 a.m.
In Response To: Re: Not bad. (General Battuta) : No, I really think the line's in need of delivery - it's the old textual : sarcasm problem. It would clearly be the kind of hate as in 'I hate going : to work' rather than 'I hate Hitler'; it's a nuisance, an irritating part : of the job. Who doesn't hate those suicide Grunts? :D Yeah - just don't "feel" Jun delivering that line brings anything to the table and, even sarcastic, goes against the flow. That you quickly stomped on someone saying something similar is what stood out. : I don't think having Jun say 'I hate suicide grunts' contradicts his 'I kill : the enemy, but do not hate them' quote - they're two different kinds of : hate. : That...is something I was worried about. But Kat seems able to transmit in, : even in the original, and I'd assumed it was an ECM device even back then. : At one point I had a line about how she was having trouble finding clear : frequencies, but I cut it. Maybe it should've stayed? What would you : advise? Well, I'm one of those folks who, while able to see plot holes, etc, still permitted myself to enjoy the story. If you're going to make due with what you're working with (dedication to keeping the levels/flow largely intact), you should try to effectively communicate around the issues. Perhaps having Kat talk Jun through a "signal boost" setting on the device or having a relay set at an opportune location during a cutscene handles that? : If you read through the threads linked up top you can see I've accepted a lot : of feedback. Off the top of my head there's the Mom thing, Kat's attitude : in Sword base (and general personality) and the Ackerson issue. Oh - I've seen you take in feedback which is why it stood out like a sore thumb when you didn't take THAT feedback. It's a line that's out of character. Of course, I also thought that Kat's insubordination *should* have been out of character for a Spartan - even a III, but YMMV : As long as it's presented reasonably I'm definitely open.

Message Index

Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	General Battuta	12/9/10 5:36 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	Hawaiian Pig	12/9/10 6:17 p.m.
Not bad.	BlueNinja	12/9/10 6:18 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Battuta	12/9/10 6:20 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	BlueNinja	12/9/10 6:36 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	Hawaiian Pig	12/9/10 6:39 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Battuta	12/9/10 6:47 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Vagueness	12/9/10 7:38 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Battuta	12/9/10 7:44 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	SonofMacPhisto	12/9/10 7:50 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Vagueness	12/10/10 1:29 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Battuta	12/10/10 8:01 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	Wayward Spleen™	12/10/10 8:59 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Battuta	12/10/10 9:31 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	Wayward Spleen™	12/10/10 9:50 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Battuta	12/10/10 9:55 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	Wayward Spleen™	12/10/10 10:10 a.m.
A wizard did it. *NM*	Beckx	12/10/10 10:14 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	Kermit	12/10/10 10:23 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Battuta	12/10/10 10:59 a.m.
i fail so hard *NM*	General Battuta	12/10/10 10:59 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	BlueNinja	12/9/10 7:09 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	Kermit	12/9/10 8:23 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	Hawaiian Pig	12/9/10 9:34 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	7he grunt w/a plasma pistol	12/9/10 9:57 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	Kermit	12/9/10 10:46 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	Hawaiian Pig	12/9/10 11:02 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	Quirel	12/9/10 11:16 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	Quirel	12/9/10 11:17 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	Hawaiian Pig	12/9/10 11:55 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Battuta	12/10/10 12:01 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	Hawaiian Pig	12/10/10 12:35 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Vagueness	12/10/10 1:38 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Battuta	12/10/10 8:02 a.m.
Re: Not bad.	Hikaru-119	12/10/10 12:38 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	General Battuta	12/10/10 12:55 p.m.
Re: Not bad.	Hawaiian Pig	12/10/10 1:04 a.m.
aaaaaaaaagh	General Battuta	12/9/10 6:24 p.m.
A much tighter rewrite *NM*	SonGoharotto	12/9/10 7:07 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	SonofMacPhisto	12/9/10 7:15 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	General Battuta	12/9/10 7:17 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	SonofMacPhisto	12/9/10 7:24 p.m.
Furthermore...	SonofMacPhisto	12/9/10 7:43 p.m.
Re: Furthermore...	Hawaiian Pig	12/9/10 9:38 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	Quirel	12/9/10 10:26 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	General Battuta	12/9/10 10:27 p.m.
Yes and No	7he grunt w/a plasma pistol	12/9/10 10:31 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	Quirel	12/9/10 11:10 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	General Battuta	12/9/10 11:16 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	Quirel	12/10/10 12:23 a.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	Louis Wu	12/10/10 7:35 a.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	General Battuta	12/10/10 8:03 a.m.
Alien bastards are gonna pay for busting my ride	Beckx	12/10/10 7:40 a.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	Hikaru-119	12/10/10 12:42 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	SonGoharotto	12/10/10 4:29 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	7he grunt w/a plasma pistol	12/10/10 4:44 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	SonGoharotto	12/10/10 7:31 p.m.
I really like these.	SPARTAN-034	12/9/10 10:37 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	Archilen	12/10/10 8:17 a.m.
There is a a Recon Alpha	Hikaru-119	12/11/10 9:10 p.m.
Re: There is a a Recon Alpha	General Battuta	12/11/10 10:06 p.m.
Re: There is a a Recon Alpha	Hikaru-119	12/11/10 10:18 p.m.
Re: There is a a Recon Alpha	General Battuta	12/11/10 10:55 p.m.
I did one better than write a quote	Hikaru-119	12/11/10 11:06 p.m.
Re: I did one better than write a quote	General Battuta	12/11/10 11:11 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	Jo	12/11/10 10:47 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	General Battuta	12/11/10 10:54 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	Jo	12/11/10 11:20 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	General Battuta	12/11/10 11:28 p.m.
Re: Reach, Rewritten: Nightfall	Jo	12/12/10 1:34 p.m.