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| Re: A Fistful of Arrows Adjunct: Eliza Ingrid bio | |
| Posted By: Leviathan <levihoffmeier@gmail.com> | Date: 9/4/11 7:34 p.m. |
In Response To: Re: A Fistful of Arrows Adjunct: Eliza Ingrid bio (Flynn J Taggart) : Great stuff, funny side note about Governor Jacob Jiles. I love the attention : to detail. Only critique I'd have is the semi-casual use of language in : the bio, for example "involvement of Spartans definitely : warranted." In most of the Bungie supplementary material that isn't : jokey, they tend to make an effort to be in character with their use of : voice and language, for example an ONI officer would use language a : professional spook would use, or an AI or an alien would use : translated-to-english language that those creatures would use. Just off : the top of my head an alternative sentence if one were to assume the info : is coming from an ONI operative would be "authorization of Group : Three assets justified given the sensitive nature of the leak." Maybe : you didn't intende to have your adjunct series be in character like : Bungie's supplementary material, in which case that's 100% OK! Your work : continues to be fantastic, thanks Levi. These two adjunct articles that I have released were written with the idea that the speaker is a civilian historian culling facts together from intel made public by ONI, possibly after the Covenant War. I never really made that clear. Perhaps I can add an introduction in somewhere to cover that detail. :) Other articles will be from different perspectives and in different formats (letter from an Insurrectionist, a city tourist guide, etc). It just happened these two I've finished were the most similar to each other.
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