In Response To: "403" Episode 1 (Featuring Frank Sixer) (Halo0001 X)
It was... well, ok, but I've got a few suggestions.
1. The "Hey, we're playing Halo!" angle has been done to death.
2. Don't show the characters picking up the weapons. In several scenes, the gun magically jumps from the ground to their hands.
3. Fifteen minutes is incredibly excessive, especially when the episode is so heavily focused on combat. What you showed there probably could have been conveyed in a four to five minute episode.
4. Cinematography definitely needs some work. Try not to lock the camera to your characters.
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