Re: chapter 4 terminal needing editing


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Re: chapter 4 terminal needing editing

Posted By: patrick Date: 12/22/07 10:09 p.m.
In Response To: Re: chapter 3 terminal needing editing (patrick)

Dread Not, poly 334, quote-
-I would take it with us back the the future, but its Cybernetic Junction appears to be non-functional, and without it, the ship is trapped here in the timeline.
It's hard to see it just bolded, but I suggest you drop the comma after without it in addition to correcting the first clause.

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Re: chapter 1 terminal needing editing	patrick	12/16/07 12:15 a.m.
Re: chapter 2 terminal needing editing	patrick	12/16/07 9:00 p.m.
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Re: chapter 3 terminal needing editing	Forrest of B.org	12/20/07 11:08 a.m.
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Re: chapter 4 terminal needing editing	patrick	12/22/07 10:09 p.m.
Re: chapter 4 terminal needing editing	patrick	12/22/07 10:38 p.m.
Re: chapter 4 terminal needing editing	Forrest of B.org	12/22/07 10:51 p.m.
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Re: chapter 4 terminal needing editing	patrick	12/23/07 12:44 a.m.
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Re: Eternal Story Analysis	Dav Flamerock	12/19/07 5:55 p.m.
Re: Eternal Story Analysis	Forrest of B.org	12/20/07 12:27 a.m.
Pissing On The Corporation	patrick	12/20/07 5:07 a.m.
Re: Two instances of questionable behavior in ch4	patrick	12/23/07 3:39 a.m.



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